Yay for New Song

[meoblast001]

I made a new song the other day and got it up on my website. Here's a direct link to the song (http://meoblast001.mysticgalaxies.com/ogg/tracknd.ogg). Tell me what you think... and don't forget to use the poll as well. =)

[Taiyo.uk]

Overall it doesn't sound too bad, but the beeping noises stick out a little too much IMO - they just sound too 'sharp' I guess.

Still, it's good to see another musician here, welcome to the forums!

[Mirio]

another?
Play silvercity and listen to his music

[Taiyo.uk]

[Sepelio]

Overall it doesn't sound too bad, but the beeping noises stick out a little too much IMO - they just sound too 'sharp' I guess.

Still, it's good to see another musician here, welcome to the forums!

I'd agree with this. The beeps really ruined the flow when I was listening to it. Its great other than that though!

[Mirio]

:!:

the song of Silvercity is The Beast of Insanity by him

[ai]

Yup, that's what I was going to say, when it starts at 1.36 and then again at 2 somewhere. Those should go or be redone somehow, they don't really fit there as it stands now.
But overall it was a very good song.

[meoblast001]

I tried cleaning that part up. Now that I listen to it, I guess I didn't do a good job. I'll fix it

OK all updated. Relisten.

[oskar669]

Dynamics wouldn't hurt. Usually if you have groupings of two notes a musician would play either up to one note or have the second note follow the first one.

I would also like some space somewhere in between. If you have a constant I -III IV in omit-everything chords it might suffer from the chinese torture effect after the third consecutive listening.

Don't want to sound too negative... it sounds pretty nice, but I think it needs a little tweaking.

One simple idea to liven it up would be to turn the two measure loop into 4 and adding a little variation on each second two-bar phrase - like a little call and response.
Emphasis is on 'little' - like in most songs you hear the drummer play the bass on 3+ instead of 3 in the last bar of 4, or adds a little variation. - this could be a sound effect or something - just to make it less repetitive.