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The storyline is fucking awsome, but the wording in some places isn't.

The planned release date is sometime next year.

Replace "next year" with "2007," so it will still be acurate after 2006.

The plague was incredible. It was the most devastating in human history. The virus spread by touch and became a threat to all of the world.

All those sentences are redundant. Something like "The plague became the most devastating in human history. Spreading by touch, it became a threat to the whole world." would be better.

but without a substantial amount of evidence—they dared not open a public debate

That hyphen doesn't really belong there.

The death toll from the plague drastically fell. More joined the fight against the plague.

The same as the second comment. My suggestion is "With more people joining the fight against the plague, the death toll fell drastically."

The new vessels were capable of traveling at extreme speeds over 100 kilometers per second. The vessels were gigantic compared to previous space technology, able to transport 100,000 people per ship.

Again, too many sentances. Make it something like "Dispite the vessels' gigantic size - able to transport 100,000 people at a time - they traveled at speeds over 100 kilometers per second."

The shuttles became efficient enough to migrate the population to mars in less than 12 years

Forgot a period at the end.

The plague had consumed all of earth. It had reduced Africa and Asia to bleak wastelands, making them unlivable.

Mentioning the plague twice is redundant. A redo of the second sentence: "Africa and Asia had been reduced to bleak wastelands, making them unlivable."

[KadaverJack]

The planned release date is sometime next year.

Replace "next year" with "2007," so it will still be acurate after 2006.

I think that's a pretty clever PR trick
Instead of giving a release date and saying "when it's done" he just says "sometime next year", so nobody will notice the delay...
Even if it's one year or more

[pol pot]

I take it "next year" will stay like that until they acctually plan to release it in the next year

[Vermeulen]

Fixed

[Lord Wolf]

Some more corrections, and other improvements:

2063, the year The United States collapsed after being struck by a human engineered plague from an unknown source. As the country fell it left the countries Japan, China and Russia to rise to power.

The Plague destroyed everything in its path, just by the slightest touch, it became a threat to the whole world. The Americans acted as any country would on the brink of its own destruction; ordering the containment and disposal of the human carriers, in effectively wiping out near a quarter of the population.

As The Americans called out for help, uniting with the rest of North and South America.

Asia, in fear of the plague, secluded themselves and moving further apart from not only the troubled Americans, but also the Europeans. The Americans, always weary of Asia, came to believe, without substantial evidence, that the source of the plague was Japan. They dared not open a public debate, but rumors still fueled their hatred of the Asians.

Despite the containment work done by The Americans, The Plague suddenly broke out in China, who unlike the Americans, was unable to contain the disease. The resulting losses where devistating.

Immediately the Chinese accused The Americans, claiming that The Americans had conspired with terrorists to infect their country. As was expected, The Americans denied China’s accusations, but animosity nevertheless emerged and terrorist activity erupted between the two nations.

The Plague began to spread to surrounding nations. The Asian governments of the world met and discussed possible solutions, one of which was put forward by a brilliant Russian scientist by the name of Edward Johansmier.

Johansmier deduced that genetically, the engineered virus was virtually unstoppable and drew feasible plans of terriforming Mars into a habitable envirment fit for human colonization. With this, Marasia, the project to save Asia began advertising to the public.

The prospect of a new civilization on Mars boosted morale for the public as well as the fighting forces behind them. With more people joining the fight against The Plague, its grip on its human prey began to weaken.

As Johansmier had theorized, explorers, prior to Mars public access, were able to heat ice caps of the planet, creating a breathable atmosphere, with temperatures and weather well under moderate standards.

In 2083, with their complete dedication to the project, the Marasian colonies develope astounding plasma "Dreadnought" vessels, which dispite their gigantic size, able to transport 100,000 people at a time, can outperform any other human vessel, traveling at speeds over 100 kilometers per second.

Numerals vessels were lanched from Earth, comprised of three types: Control, Civilian and Engineering. The vessels, on demand, would unite forming a colossal vessel. The Marasian colonies began shipping their most valuable human seed to Mars.

While the vessels where amazingly efficient, nothing could counter the years of planning it required to move millions of people. All up, the Dreadnoughts, as they became known, took a litte less than 12 years to migrate the population to Mars.

Notes:
1. As this would have been a major event in history, it wouldn't be "the plague", but "The Plague".
2. The United States should now simply be known as "The Americans".
3. The Dreadnoughts are vessels, but then later ships. Stick with one of the other, I chose vessels.

I'll keep working tomorrow night

[KillaGrunt]

Great story.

[Barfly]

Great story.

2 years late

Damn, forum spammer or stalker..
I cant figure out what he is.
But one thing is for sure, he's a kid under 16 that needs a friend.
prolly under 12, ..
Advice..
GO PLAY SOME BASEBALL OR SOCCER WITH THE KIDS IN THE HOOD..
ffs
Get outdoors kid, it makes ya a better person in the end.

Not dissin ya, well yeah maybe I am, but it's good advice, I know where ya live from your IP addy, summer's almost over.
Have some fun , GO OUTSIDE!!!!

[Psychcf]

How about something involving a four-way war between robots, humans, aliens, and demons?

[KillaGrunt]

Actually I'm in school. sooooooooooooooooo

[Eureka!]

Considering that all the main continents of the Earth have been united, (you describe the numerous countries within Europe as 'Europeans' and Asia is mentioned in the same manner), don't you think that each political body should have a more specific name?

For instance, the European Union (Europe), the North Atlantic Federation (Americas), and the Asiatic Union of Free Traders (Asia) etc.

I think that this will give the story a more futuristic air, more realistic and within context, the player getting a sense of global change and futurism.

Just a suggestion.